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Downwrite - April 2008

The Burden of Excess

April 1st 2008 07:39

Coins are in my pockets there
Gosh how I would love some air

The countless coins about which I have sung
Prevent more singing from my lung

These coins I’d counted over again
Give me no hint of oxygen

So in the ocean, the coral I join
As I’m weighed to the sand by pocketed coins

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Comment by Anonymous

April 1st 2008 11:35

fun...

but you could've ended with..

"..by pocketed florin!"

Comment by Brenton

April 1st 2008 11:40

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I have to admit i never knew of florin till now

Comment by Always Eighteen

April 4th 2008 02:21

Always Eighteen

my pockets are empty

Comment by Brenton

April 4th 2008 09:01

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You can thus float.

Comment by Mountain Fog

April 4th 2008 09:02

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I did, about florins...sadly...I remember actually having one or two in my pocket....so old...dammit...

and so little to show for it....!

cheers

fog

Comment by Always Eighteen

April 7th 2008 12:33

Always Eighteen

.. and float I shall.

Great poem, by the way!

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