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I Need You, You Don't Need Me

May 16th 2007 13:00

Bright and bubbly in the picture
With your friends, go figure
You always were happy
unlike me, I was sappy

Looking at you breaks my heart
I always loved you but I didn't know where to start
to tell you that I loved you
that I dreamed of it being me, and you too

But I was afraid, rightly so
I was a fool, didn't you know?
You did, but you were too cute
To tell me how I was a brute

Not for you, not me for you
I would have said I love you too
if I was brave enough
All I could really say was some funny stuff

I sent you a letter
Thought I could make things better
For you and me, the opposite of sappy
If I just had the chance I'd make us happy

But I came off too strong
Damn well it took long
For you to read the letter
And realize I'm no better

Do you really need me?
Or do I need you?
It doesn't matter anymore
That this poem should rhyme

You don't need me, but I need you
If I just had the chance to make us happy
All I would be doing is making myself happy
You don't need me, but I need you

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Comment by Brenton

May 16th 2007 13:42
Cute, you kind of pull it off by not letting it be taken too seriously.

I think though, some symbolism or something would be sweet. Make people GUESS what you're rambelling about. That usually gives something a more universal potential.

Comment by Ahmed

May 16th 2007 13:46
I came up with the idea on the bus while trying to not breathe in the smell of vomit (someone had vomitted in the seat at the back).

It went like this 'oh god who the hell vomitted on the bus? I mean damn it some stupid kid probably!' Then I started thiking of the many ways I'd wanna punch the kids face in (yeah it smelled pretty bad ).

Then it kind of came to me 'what if he had some sort of terrible illness?'. So suddenly I just changed emotionally thinking about it.

So I thought instead of threats and mock bashing (in my head) I could write a poem from the perspective of some heart broken dude about someone he's interested in then realize how he's only being a selfish git.

At least thats what I think, I probably just spoiled the entire thing for you, what do you mean by guess? As in guess I'm rambling on about some girl?

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